Published September 7, 2008
It has been a long year.
Now its time to go,
But I don’t want to leave.
How do I suppose to say goodbye?
I know I will see them next year.
Why am I so torn up about this?
I guess I just never like to say goodbye.
It always seem like the end.
All these years were great but now its hard.
I don’t want to forget them.
I really enjoyed it here,
But now its time to say goodbye.
When the last day came I walked with my head down.
I was kind of happy to leave but sad to not see my friends.
They say we are best friends until the end.
I believe them but I would like to see them once in awhile.
I said my goodbyes and headed out the door.
I walked a block to my house in tears.
Just because…
I didn’t want to say goodbye.
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It was a LITTLE poem.
i dont even want to start on the grammar.
but still...improve..
It was a sad little poem and I liked it. It was good.
It has been a long year.
Now its time to go, (Maybe, put 'But, now it's time to go')
But I don’t want to leave. (A comma after 'But')
How do I suppose to say goodbye? (It should be 'How am I')
I know I will see them next year. (A comma after 'know')
Why am I so torn up about this?
I guess I just never like to say goodbye.
It always seem like the end.
All these years were great but now its hard.
I don’t want to forget them.
I really enjoyed it here,
But now its time to say goodbye.
When the last day came I walked with my head down. (A comma after 'came')
I was kind of happy to leave but sad to not see my friends. (It should be 'not to see')
They say we are best friends until the end.
I believe them but I would like to see them once in awhile.
I said my goodbyes and headed out the door.
I walked a block to my house in tears.
Just because…
I didn’t want to say goodbye.
Well, like I said, it was sad poem. And I liked it. But you could have used more metaphors and phrases. It would have added an interest. Well, it was good.
Well done.
Hmm... wow...
Normally stuff like this would just seem so cliched, but this is actually very good. You totally put me out of business in the bad grammar department. So sorry if this review is totally useless...
Again, wow...