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Thank you, everybody! :) Wozzles: Thanks for your opinion. I didn't want to make Gramma's death so horrifying, though. She's Gramma, and i wanted to make it subtle anyway. 3B: ...

Hello again! :) I'll be critiquing on the comp instead of at school (:shock: I know!) so tell me which critique is better. The one for part 2 earlier was ...

Here I am with the crit for part 2. :) The interesting thing about being a henchman, [no comma] is when realize you’re not but that you might be the ...

Thank you for your reviews, guys. :) Woz--Gah, you're right. What three words did he repeat in his head?? Oh yeah...*edit* Now whatcha think? :D Make the horror relate to ...

Back once again! I guess you're not sick of my nit-pickiness yet. That'll quickly change. :wink: “I’m off.” [comma rather than period] Yazra announced, watching the bear tearing away at ...

I'm back! You missed me, right? :wink: You don't have to answer. :D The bear stood , leaning heavily against a thick pine, it’s [no apostrophe ^^] body heaving from ...

Oh, thank you sooo much! Your crit is greatly appreciated! :D I fixed the grammar issues. Once I get writing, I forget completely about my language. :roll: I'm very happy ...

Thanks a lot, guys! Gladius--Wow. :shock: I'll study your critique more thoroughly in a moment, but that's really long. That just explains how tired I really was. Also, there is ...

Thanks you two! Those crits were greatly appreciated! Seeing as you both critted pretty much the same way, I'll give you two the same comment. :) I fixed the grammar ...

Hey, Ash! If I remember correctly, someone is currently critting at the same time as me. So forgive me if I repeat anything they say. ^^; I'm in my critting ...

I don't know why, but I posted twice, lol. My critique is next down. :P

Yay! It's up!! *reads* Her muscles ached from the battle with the dragon , and she was overwhelmed with guilt that she had caused the Hero of Time’s capture. She ...

Hey, Ash! Glad to see this is up already! *reads* "I remember when some humans [s]wanting[/s] wanted to go to war as soon as they got a gun for every ...

Thanks for the critiques, ya'll! Joe: Thanks for the suggestion. I fixed it so it should look better. Dr. Clicky: Dr. Clicky! :D You should come in the chat more ...

I feel kind of bad about double posting, but you said you edited this, so here I go. It certainly has improved. :D But soon his nervousness turned to sadness, ...