JabberHut

I AM HERE FOR ROUND TWO! I'm gonna try to just address the changes or new things I noticed. :D I like that there's a little background as to why ...

Yes, absolutely! I intend to keep reading, so I'd love to be updated on new releases. Thank you! :D

That's really cool! I love that you're doing this. It really helps not only you but the readers/viewers really get invested into this world and these characters. It really shows ...

It's a really fun take on their relationship, for sure! I could never help but wonder about it myself. It really adds a new depth to his emotions considering everything ...

Yay! I'm glad to hear this is still on your mind and you still have motivation to keep it up. Hopefully, whatever is ailing you will subside enough to provide ...

OH DUH. Of course that was the lie story, derp me. That makes absolute sense. For some reason, it just escaped me that it would be the cover story. I ...

Ohey, nice! Making some good progress this weekend then. Yeah, I try to read at least a little everyday so it stays somewhat fresh in my mind as I go ...

Bahaha, that makes sense then! It's a recent post, so it's probably just tacked onto the bottom of the list. No big deal at all! Oooh, so there's been additional ...

Oop! I guessed I just assumed it would be Albie 'cause we hadn't heard hide nor hair about Dante in several chapters. I also missed the glasses bit, but I ...

Oh, excellent! I'll keep that in mind then. That also tells me there will be more conclusions than a simple camera-pan over the Alps. :D

Ah, that does make a bit more sense! I'm sure I misinterpreted that detail along the line. Does the human lose its emotions during the process? Or perhaps it's temporary, ...

Anytime! I look forward to reading your revision. :D

You're very welcome, by the way! :D YWS is renowned for giving each other constructive reviews to better each other's craft. We're happy to have you with us!

A good practice is to simply write out the poem as a proper sentence with no line breaks and see where you would naturally put punctuation in that scenario! If ...

Ooh, I see! I think the issue then lies with the fact that the entire intro doesn't refer to any sort of darkness because it's busy praising the once-perfect world ...