Young Writers Society

Hello, FlamingPhoenix here with a short review for you on this lovely day, I will also try to help get your work out the green room.

Let's get started.

So as I was reading this I saw you don't have very much punctuation, so I think you might want to put some more in, it will also help with the flow a bit.

Well now that's done let's talk about the good things.

Even if you didn't have much punctuation I still think the flow was nice, and it was still easy to read. I saw that some of your words rimed, and that was really fun to read. I also saw some of them didn't but that's fine it kind of made this poem different to the others.
I thought the length of the poem was great, just long enough to get all the feelings and emotions that you want to get across, across. I think if it was any shorter i don't think it would have worked as well.
When I saw the name to the poem I new I had to come read it, it was like pulling me in, and that is what you are looking for in a title. Well that's what I think.

Again amazing job, this was written really well. And I'm glad I got the chance to read and review it for you. I hope you will never stop writing and keep posting really good works out on YWS. Have a great day or night.

Your friend
FlamingPhoenix.
Reviewing with a fiery passion.

Hello! Welcome to YWS.

I really like how you compared the diversity of women with the diversity of flowers. You had some excellent word choice here that really helped bring out the image and made the comparisons more personal, more relatable. And better yet, I love how it ends with a bout of self-acceptance and self-worth. It's a beautiful message with a beautiful theme.

The first half flowed really nicely. I like the linebreaks you chose here as they help emphasize each part of the message. My favorite line is probably "And some with beauty / Undiscovered, withered." Very strong word choice here.

Some, with high perfection bloom
No autumn, no winters befall doom
Some rest upon the majestic head
Others entwined, put over the dead

This is really a beautiful poem. Each line short enough to capture attention and powerful enough not to bore. I love the power in the message and the grasping hands of the given title. All I can say is be careful of punctuation inside the poem and the split of each line. The end of line one could use punctuation to put emphasis in the pause rather than leaving it unmarked.