JabberHut

Hello! Thought I'd drop by and take a look-see...*starts to read* There he stood, tall, slim, but in his own way , handsome Is that highlighted part even necessary? Is ...

Hey, it's Woodland Wolf! Welcome to YWS! We met in the chat, remember? Ja? No? Well, I'm gonna crit anyway. I hope I'm somewhat helpful. I'm a big grammar nit-pick, ...

Heya, came to read your story. I'm excited, it's an awesome idea for you and Timea to do this kind of duo series. It was early summer, and a thirteen ...

"I was..." Karen mumured inder her breath. Oops! "under", not "inder" Karen shook her head. "No,no..." Spacing :wink: A hoarse, raspy cackle came from the figures; it was a shadow's ...

This is more of a summary rather than a prologue, but it sounds interesting. Is your story related to Timea's in some way? I can't wait to read. I like ...

And here's part 4! All the Imperial reinforcements surged forward- the first few lines inevitably mowed down- but soon the Alliance became rather worried and panicked This is just a ...

Ooh, it's about time for some good fantasy. *begins to read* Kira was seated at the head of the table, the seat nearest the door. She fixed her light blue ...

Oh, a sight for sore eyes! I'll try not to repeat anything that Kitty said, but consider her comments. :wink: Let's see... Flying through the alleys again, the wind in ...

Hello again! I noticed you posted the third part and had to read! Grammar, grammar...not much grammar problems. You did pretty well with that! You must have proof-read :wink: All ...

The shortest of the boys, who had freckles on his face and was wearing a black beanie on his head to hide his shabby hair repetitively pressed the palm of ...

Hey, Badger! Came to read chapter 1. Let's see here...*starts to read* but she was still shivering and her nose still ran and she was still yawning widely, her eyes ...

This definitely filled in some info after reading part 2. :lol: Let's see if I could help you out with some suggestions. Hunter knows his Vader :wink: Darth Vader grew ...

Hey-lo! I liked this, even though I never read Part 1. I'll probably go look at that next. However, I agree that Vader seems out of character. Let's take a ...

This was such a sweet story! I got goosebumps at the end! *looks at arm* :shock: many goosebumps...they're big! Anyway, very well written. Not much typos, though a few suggestions ...

Very interesting. You have something, I can say that, but, I agree, it was a bit confusing. No typos! *claps* Bravo! However, I was confused. Was he thinking to himself? ...