JabberHut

Hello, there! Here to give you a general overview. :) Grammar: There were some typos, sentence structures, and punctuation that I fought myself to ignore. If you went through it ...

Hey, there! Long time, no chat! :wink: The yellowed pages of my book flipped in the gentle breeze, bringing me to my book marked place. I'm pretty sure bookmark is ...

Yay! It's up!! ^^ The monkey climbed up Henry and threw his arms around Henry’s neck. Henry hugged the chimp. Maybe a pronoun, or use the captain or any other ...

Hello again! I taste blood. Great hook! ^^ That fist that met my cheek, [dash instead] was it really his? Underlined -- Repetition. It's a bit annoying in this case, ...

Very good, Easy. :) Your imagery was very impressive, if I do say so myself. Here's just a few observations, both compliments and suggestion. Raven hair; thick and coarse -- ...

A wonderful poem, girl! I have some suggestions that might explain why you're unsure of it, but it really is written well. :) Locker door creakily opens , revealing Photograph ...

I have to top Andy's critique? T_T As you walk down the first aisle , the thick tangle of silk wraps around you, suffocating, enticing. You wonder, vaguely, if any ...

Yay! Part 4!! “That’s probably true,” Henry nodded. “Funny, [no comma] how I’m Captain, and not him.” “Well , I actually like to steer the vessel sometimes!” By the way, ...

Please don't yell at me for capitalization or punctuation. I left it like this purposely because I want it to be completely up to the reader's interpretation. Tell me your ...

Hello, Andy! :) I read as I go, so any questions that I may ask may be answered later on in the story, and that's okay. It's good that I ...

I read your first parts and... I loved it! Had me hooked the whole time. I found a couple typos and such here and there, but I have been asked ...

I read it! :D Told ya I was gonna read it! ^^ I loved it. It's only a script and I felt, as the audience, that I was actually part ...

I'm starting to catch up on my critiques. I'm all excited. So here' goes! Btw, I'm not going to check the others to see if I repeated anything. I usually ...

Back for the second part! :D He’s brighter than that fire under [s]Bezelbub’s [/s] Beelzebub desk. The two [s]brother’s [/s] brothers were opposites, [no comma] from the sixteenth universe. Sixt

Thank you so much for PMing me the links. I was going to crit a couple weeks ago, but I got completely confused as to what to crit, lol. I ...