JFW1415

I edited once more. The version that is posted now is the one I turned in. I am still planning on fixing the emotions, hospital scene, etc. - all the ...

I edited once more. The version that is posted now is the one I turned in. I am still planning on fixing the emotions, hospital scene, etc. - all the ...

On nearly all my works I get the comments about apostrophies, but it's simply the way I write XD so I'm not really planning on changing it. I just prefer ...

Here you go! ~JFW1415

Thanks for the review! I'm actually going to rework this a lot. I hate how it is now, and have several suggestions on how to make it less essay-like and ...

Thanks sooooo much!!!!!! Sorry about the confusion at first i wanted general, but then i realized that I phrased it wrong and I guess i sort of changed my mind ...

The promised review! ;P

I’m baaaack! As promised, a second critique on the revised version follows. I see that this is still really short, so I’m a bit afraid to edit, but I’ll give ...

Hey. I realize this was posted a while ago, and you've already turned it in, but I read it and wanted to comment. Thanks for the review! I'm not turning ...

Other than that, the same comments as before - more description and emotion wouldn't hurt. You haven't made that many changes so I'll not comment further but good work so ...

This has been updated, and has a new title. Please critique! This is due soon. :shock: ~JFW1415

[s]This has been edited, and has a new title. Please critique! This is due soon. :shock: ~JFW1415[/s] Edit: I edited once more. The version that is posted now is the ...

This has now been edited. Please give more critique! It's due soon! ~JFW1415

Turns out I was wrong. The sentence was 'Sometimes the name they give you is all wrong.' It was from . *Shrug* Sorry, the sentence just sounded a bit familiar. ...

Told you I'd forget. :wink: Again, I'll try to get to this to critique fully, but please don't yell at me if I don't. I have a bad memory, and ...