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The promised critique! Nit-Picks huddling in groups because the concrete's too cold to sit on or hustling money out of one another. The part after 'or' doesn't fit with the ...

*Waves* Nit-Picks The party had been going on for an hour when it went wrong, though by no fault of those hosting it. To avoid repeating 'party', I'd suggest starting ...

Hey there! JFW here. :) Nit-Picks She couldn’t believe that she was actually on her father’s ship. She couldn’t believe that she was actually leaving the docks that she grew ...

Hey saves! JFW here. I was just browsing through the forums, and saw that this had no comments, so I decided to review it! (Well… it had no comments when ...

Nit-Picks My fist grew tighter and tighter as the lonesome minutes ticked by, slowly, one by one. Where was he? I'd ditch two things here. 1. Lonesome. You explain that ...

Hey Con! :) Well, I typically avoid critiquing something after Kylan, just since there's not much I can ever add, but I need to get back into the habit of ...

Snoink! Okay, well, I kinda stink at poetry. A lot. So I'm really not helpful here in the least... but I'll give it a shot? *Cringes* One rewording suggestion: The ...

Hey Nickelodeon! JFW here. You probably don't know me – I certainly don't know you – since I haven't been on in ages, but I've decided to critique your story ...

Jare-bear!!! Okay, so I've kinda been following this series since you started it, and it's kinda amazing. I don't have much experience in horror and was either too clogged down ...

*Is lame and too tired to do a real critique, and doesn't know what to say anyways, but has one comment* Just separate it, then, since you hate italics. I ...

*Is way too lame to do a real critique but you're not on and I don't want to send another PM to you when you already have a super long ...

...Well, I just read through all the other critiques, and I'm kinda confused. Some of your critiquers - Sam and Kylan - are amazing and know, well, just about everything. ...

Well, this was definitely unique Icaruss, which is why I love your writing so much. Every time I read it it's something different. It's really fun to read, since the ...

The promised critique: Overall Comments You know I love you, Ally. So... don't kill me for this? Think More TV Show Take a look at this: She set the timer ...

The promised critique: A Few Nit-Picks, But Not Many As I Skimmed Finding none, he mumbled , "[s]a[/s] A ll right, I believe you." It’s the best one around, Semi-colon ...