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This is one of the two complimentary critiques you get for entering CIA's money contest . The other will come from Bittersweet, CIA's guest judge. Aww, that was such a ...

This is one of the two complimentary critiques you get for entering CIA's money contest . The other will come from Bittersweet, CIA's guest judge. I really liked where you ...

You know I love you Ally, but seriously – do you always have to write so much ? This is 12 pages. =/ Anyways, this is one of the two ...

Hey Ralph! Here's the extra critique you earned for submitting your contest entry in by the 15th. Just be warned – I haven't critiqued in ages, so this may not ...

Hello! JFW here. I'll be your critiquer today. :) a few general things before we begin There are a few things that you need to look over to make your ...

I don't have much time, but I'm trying to keep up with my goal of one critique a day, so if something doesn't make sense be sure to PM me ...

My main complaint is that I don't buy it. I want to feel what he feels. But I'm not afraid, I'm not in pain, I'm not hungry, I don't feel ...

Honestly? I didn't like it much. You were trying way too hard to make us believe that this man was crazy. My suggestion would be to calm the writing down. ...

I really enjoyed this piece, but it didn't feel like one piece – it felt like two very different ones. I looooooved your opener, but then you just dropped it ...

Hello! *gets right to the point* I really enjoyed your story. It was well written, had well placed flashbacks, and made a rather boring event seem eventful and interesting. (Seriously, ...

All right, here's your critique. Now go switch your avatar, and don't go back. Seriously – you will make people pass out. understanding abuse This was my main problem with ...

Honestly? This was not very good. Yes, the idea behind it's fine. It could be a cute little story - if only you'd stop telling. The way you wrapped up ...

The promised critique! Sorry it's so late. I don't like doing nit-picks, and you wanted comments on the characters, so I suppose I'll talk about them for a bit? Raven ...

Well Heath, you certainly make life difficult for me. I loved this - how am I supposed to critique it? :) Anyways, I just noticed a few things. mother hen ...

Hey Selene! So, I must admit, the whole post-apocalypse thing intrigued me. Is the main character dying? Why didn't she die, if she had been in her mom when her ...