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I like it! But you still don't have much emotion. You were getting better with the scene in the hospital, but still, wouldn't they be relieved to find people? Wouldn't ...

The first part bored me. A lot. It doesn't do the story justice. And we don't need to know the exact year, as long as we know it's not in ...

I really love this! How you keep fitting in the dougnut thing is really cool. Also, now I'm starting to remember who's who (which is amazing for me,) and you're ...

Because one word, one flick of the hand, one glance, can be your end. Love this part! :P Also, the character part confuzes me a bit. I can't keep them ...

I really liked this! I wish you had began in a battle scene to continue the beginning part, though. My brain's half-asleep, so I had to read that part twice, ...

Is there any more to say? I think Sam hit about everything. In addition to her suggestions, Alex seems kind of...annoying to me. She's judging him without even knowing him. ...

She was crying hysterically as she watched the snowflakes fall before her. This line kind of bugs me. She was crying hysterically, but we just met her. We don't feel ...

If you do post more, please PM me. I really enjoyed it. I would have liked if you had added more detail about the bruise, why she was texting him ...