JFW1415

Hello! The numbers next to the highlighted correspond with the numbered comments. Extra: I forgot to tell you that I think you should combine the mother's speech a bit. The ...

Same as always. :P

Hello! :P Yet another review. Same format with the numbers; you know the drill.

Yet another critique, as asked for. :P

A review, as promised. :P By the way, it is page one and two in the first column, and three and four in the second. Also (I think I left ...

Don't revise yet! Another review on the way... :P Well, nit-picky up top, overall below. The numbers next to the highlighted correspond with the numbered comments. Also, it goes one ...

EDIT: Eh, sorry, I forgot to add the numbers. The comments part, where it says [0] goes in order. The first one that says that is number one, the second ...

I'm baaaack! :P

Hello! Nit-picky part first, and then overall comments below. The numbers that follow highlighted text correspond with the numbered comments.

Eh, my review's kind of long...sorry! By the way, if they show up side by side like I'm trying to get them to (so I don't take up TOO much ...

EDIT: Just realized that the numbers came out. :( Just count the highlighted parts; the first one is one, the second is two, etc. Sorry!

All right, this is the first time I'm critiquing with pictures, so let me know if this works! (It saves SO much time...) EDIT: Just realized that the numbers came ...

Hello! Nit-pick to follow, overall below. I’m dying, I think . At last, I am dying. Where’s the curtain? When will the dullness of this world fold back, and when ...

Hello. :P Nit-picks first, overall below. A customer. I’d put ‘new’ in between. The man is rough, strong, his fingernails filthy, his eyes like stone, or iron. I also think ...

Hello! Here comes a nit-picky review! :P Even wrapped up in sheets, which I was , the confusion in the getaway driver's voice was obvious. I’d ditch this, and get ...