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HIM. Is an amazing band, just thought I'd say that =D. When you capatalize the letters like that it's a band. Italics would do this better =D Running round in ...

It was a little weird...switching from when he hated the sun to where he's baking in it...I can only assume I've just gone back in time, and I don't like ...

The door slammed open. I've heard of doors slamming shut...but never open...I don't know if I like t the wording so much. This started out like poetry to me...I'm not ...

Can't say much more than anybody else. It was intresting, the hook wasn't bad. As for storylines go, it was good as well, nothing to critique here. It was really ...

Well, it could be improved. Paragraph structure: It seems a lot of these are shorter than they should be. Especially the ones with thoughts or dialouge (short as it may ...

Wow, for a second there I was afraid Qwerty would kill santa...which would be deeply distubing... All crazy elf rebellions aside, the critique! My main problem with this is that ...

I disagree, I like the last midnight. It fits...unless you already deleated it, in which case, awesome. There isn't much I can say to fix here, while it was emotional ...

My assumptions are proven correct when I heard Ms. Irsonja’s heavy Irish accent calling as she stomps up and down the halls upstairs, banging on doors with her meaty fist ...

This was really good. It had just the right amount of emotion without going overboard on the romantic side of things. Kudos to you! One thing you could fix though. ...

Sam, this is really good. I really enjoyed it. (small insignifigant note: I almost said quite instead of really...that's how into the story I got) Question? Is this a short ...

I don't really know if I like it, or if I just don't care to like it. Meaning: I didn't develop any feelings for Mary. The problem was that, if ...

The shock of the it made my head jerk up off of the pillow. The second 'the' shouldn't be there. Monday mornings are always a surprise, as if we never ...

I've been meaning to read this for a while now, the title would just not leave my mind. So finally I read it. I was impressed, it was very good, ...

You really like suspence don't you? You do it well, so that's a good thing =D As with chapter four, this one showed a lot more emotion to the characters. ...

Marge followed like a Jack Russell desperate for adventure. Who's Marge? "Where is she?!" I yelled. How stupid is this woman? Going back to what I've said in an earlier ...