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Thanks for the reviews :) Yeh the break was a really good idea, I definitely think it works better to give the penultimate line more of a jolt. And the ...

That's a great idea, thanks!

Thanks for the comments :) in answer to the first question it's loosely based on the story of oddyseus in the Iliad. And yeh I always get confused about capitals ...

This poem is about the death of my Grandma, not from cancer actually but I can see how you got that. Obviously there's a lot of emotion there but I'm ...

I don't really know how to get rid of the repetition in this one, it's kinda the point =p lol but thanks for the reviews :)

ok,this is starting to annoy me. 1)So what if the topic is not original,if she wants to write about it let her.Why should she have to write about flying sheep ...

The anyhoo was meant to be like that.I was just trying to show Wilf's personality.

I don't really know what the tune that you intended for it sounds I can't really judge whether it would make a good song.However, it works well as a poem.

It was a bit plain for didnt really have any meaning.Thats just my opinion,maybe it was meant to be simple? However, it sounds good to hear and flows well.

I think the long names were a mistake. Make them shorter,so they don't take an hour to read. However the way that the sentences were constructed put even the simplest ...

Format???

It's really good.Some of these stories are just boring and you just want to give up but I managed to finish this one.Despite its length.I dont know if it's just ...

I agree with the others.I thought the overall image was really draws you in and makes you want to read more.

That was one weird old man! Was that really real? It's a gd story.Doesn't really capture your imagination though.Add more description maybe.

It's really funny.You wanna get someone in to look at that printer.Mine does that too.Except my pets are all still in one peice.And yeh,space it out a bit more. It's ...