Inspiredravens

Hey there! So, its a nice story and you can go a gazillion different places with it, but it jumps around a little too much to only be using we, ...

Hi there! Wonderful poetry you have there, I can clearly see the image and everything. Now, I don't usually do much on poetry because it is so free flowing and ...

Amazing! Being able to write things like that out of a verse is something God has definitely gifted you with. There isn't much to change. At all. Well done, you ...

Nice writing style of a sarcastic teen, it goes perfectly. There are only a few places that need a little help such as "Otherwise I probably would be knocked out ...

Excellent job, however my only complaint is that you didn't give enough imagery or feeling in the part where the wind comes and you say "Just then the wind picked ...

Awesome writing! Nearly perfect. A couple things though. For starters, you should build up the boyfriend more, make him more manly, give him motives. What does he look like? You've ...

Wow. Your writing is practically flawless. The story line is great and the characters are built pretty good. The beginning is a little choppy with less imagery, but as you ...

Awesome story line you've created. I think there are a lot of different places you can take this. There are a few small editing things and typos like a few ...