InfiniteSnowfall

You could say it somehow like that (the second option), but maybe differently because it does sound a little awkward. Or, you could do this: "Guys...!" And of course, italicizing ...

Thanks for clearing everything up! :)

No problem! :)

I don't think it's that confusing! I'm excited to find out more about the characters and what will happen from here on. Also, I feel like all fantasy stories can ...

Haha, your welcome! I know the feeling :) Have a great day also! (Not sure how to make that less awkward sounding :/ haha)

Thanks so much for the review! I'm so glad you liked it. It was really fun to write, so maybe I will explore her story a little more later. Also, ...

I'll play around with it :)

I understand :) If you ever do though, let me know!

Oh, I see what you're saying. Yeah, I was unsure about that part. I thought about breaking it up, but I just left it. Ooh I love those adjectives. Thanks ...

Thanks for the review! Do you have any suggestions as to how I could make the beginning less overwhelming? Since this is for school, my teacher told us to be ...

Thank you! I'll be sure to change that :)

No problem! I just searched it up on Google real quick haha.

Thanks for the review! Blackwood also mentioned the flow of the words. I do know that it needs fixing. The thing is, I don't really know how to fix it. ...

Thanks for the review, Amethyst! I'll be sure to go in and edit those two mistakes later.

Yeah, I know it is the first chapter... It's just there was a lot of information thrown in the readers' face at once. I'll be sure to check out the ...