Incognito

Well then. I dare say you seem to have written yourself a start maybe of a story and accidentally posted it? I do hope so, because this is dreadfully lacking. ...

This was quite the dramatic piece and I'm not sure if it fits in with a short story section but I'm not even sure where else it would fit. It ...

You know me and poetry. Its like rocks and pudding. I mix it together and I try to digest it, and bam! I choke to death. But however, here I ...

I do agree with the tenses, but I'm sure crescent can help you with that and already offered. The big problem I find with your story so far is the ...

Heyo! I have to agree with Pink here. Your prologue just took away from the story. It was one just large info dump that really didn't do anything for you. ...

I don't know much about Mexico's independence story, but from the details I have gathered from your piece have made me curious. There isn't much to review upon with this ...

I don't really know what to think. It was really short and I don't think I'm supposed to thing much at this moment, because surely it is going to continue. ...

Okay, there is a lot wrong with this punctuation and grammar wise. First off, to make it a lot easier on the eyes, I would recommend breaking that huge chunk ...

I'm only reviewing this for Review Day. Otherwise, it would not be so. I find your writing very stylish and well done. It flows very well, and your characterization is ...

I think I just kind of found love. Your writing and voice is superb. Everything flows beautifully and I do enjoy the idea of this being, or creator. That being ...

Sup yo. I have to agree with Stellz on this one. It is very cliched. It is only the first chapter so I believe you will be able to pull ...

I am so proud. Like seriously. This is so much better than the last two chapters. The improvement is madness. Like I am amazed. You have gotten so much better. ...

Heyo again. (: I still feel bad for grave digging. But its for victory!~ This chapter was a lot better than the last. You have been gaining improvement. I won't ...

Forgive me for grave digging, but its review day and you posted your novel in our Discussion, so might as well review all of them right? ;) Punctuation First thing ...

I'm mainly going to talk to you about your setting because Gryph got all the main plot holes down. Now I'm sure you know how vital a setting is and ...