Incandescence

Siam, This is prose with linebreaks, and really, really bad prose, at that. More suitable locations for idle musings on cheating and its consequences on survival include: (1) a journal; ...

Alanna: What is this? Go away. Best, Brad

No. Just no. I mean that. There is a thematic issue that should be addressed which, in editing, will present a challenge far beyond changing a word here, a word ...

Hi, guys - I guess part of the problem is that: this isn't supposed to be House, or anything relating to it, and I think trying to compare the two ...

Hi, Crysi - Indeed, the story follows an episodic pattern of conflict until 11. From 12 to about 25, though, the conflict begins tapering away from Jonathon/Kyle to Jonathon/Sarah, Kyle/Sarah, ...

All: This poem is about getting tattoos. Best, Bad

Kinsley-- niteowl has identified the only remnant from this train crash worth saving for later use. The rest of this will fit nicely in a trash bin. Best, Brad

drummerboyb-- Moved. From now on, please post your work in its respective section. Best, Brad

drummerboyb - Moved. Writing in a Fiction topic is the same as writing in Poetry forums. Click the appropriate forum, and start a new thread. Thanks, Brad

Chandni - Behold as we conquer this geometry: the abstract topology sustains and fools when detached from its source. The universe can only parallel that which is sacred. As our ...

Clau-- Thanks for taking the time to read&respond. A loop diuretic is something that enhances renal function--no foul spelling at play. "lap" should be "lip"--good catch. I'm not sure I ...

Fand - It's a one trick pony, and the trick isn't that great. Condesnse the last two strophes to one, drop the boring repetition, and you'll have a poem about ...

Snoink: Thanks for your time and consideration. Since we already discussed this, I'll omit it from here. Colleen: Also thanks for reading and responding. Sadly, the patient is a knock-on-wood ...

Claudette: Thank you so much for taking the time to read and respond. This is actually part of the much larger Chionophobia story I am working on, which I will ...

yoha_ahoy-- I must agree with write_me that as a poem, this is very weak. It would probably generate far more success as lyrics, and I urge you to move it ...