Incandescence

This is stupid. I can't even begin to give you a criticism because all you do is state the obvious in every single one of your poems (except the most ...

Well, Bubble, you've now become my favorite writer on here. This poem is not as powerful as it led me to believe. I think the ending should be tinkered with ...

As Brian said, it's not really a story or a poem, but a mix. The idea of being able to chronicle your life into a CD is genius. I really ...

You IMed me this poem-song, which must be why I did not comment on it. Anyway, you know I liked it. I liked it again after rereading it. It seems ...

The Wizard's Chest is awesome, and anyone who says it isn't is a moron. This magnetic poetry, however, is not. Except for the second one, that one is awesome. The ...

This is a redundantly obsessive poem about the people in your life. Instead of having an unbridled sense of childhood, I'd like to see something showing me a reserved sense ...

This is not an apology for my below comment. I really was not pleased with this. What could have been a beautiful and moving poem was mutated into a teenage ...

Alexis or whomever, this will be harsh, so, for the sake of your feelings, I suggest you read no further. At the spot/in the room/where two walls/meet and greet/alexis is ...

Talk about redundancy. I don't think this pulled off the effect you wanted it to, or otherwise you didn't want a very good one. I'm just going to say that ...

Well, Morgan, I must admit I'm thoroughly impressed. This is better than any combination of your suicidal poems. Point being that in death and suicidal poems, the plot doesn't go ...

This purveys the sense of being original, but really it has all been said before. And, if you're going to write a poem, don't steal the lines from the Alamo. ...

Mmmm... Hmmm... :nose twitches: I didn't like it. The rhythm was okay, but I liked how you did the "stop/drop/roll" or "stop/look/listen" which enhanced the rhythm. However, certain lines, such ...

I could just as easily Googled what you showed me. Like Crysi said, you need to post your scripts here, not reference us off to some other site. I personally ...

You had great rhythm first stanza; however, your second stanza leaves much to be desired. I'm not sure if I've said this before, but get away from death and suicidal ...

I'm going to almost have to agree with the rest of the people. I was moved by this poem--its feel and rhythm was great. On a look back, the syntax ...