Incandenza

Hi Bre, As a story this is extremely short. All you write about here is that the narrator's uncle died and s/he is feeling upset about it. I feel, You ...

Hi Grape, Although, personally, I don't like extremely short prologues, your one is neat. The story is, obviously, going to be a fantasy type revolving around this "land". I felt ...

Hey Twinkle, Your story here is interesting, but I felt it was a bit fragmented. Your descriptions are pretty good, particularly here, I stood on the metal window sill, looking ...

hello, okay, so I have read the other two and I agree with Noelle, this is better. The story's getting really interesting and I think this project of yours can ...

being a DFW fan myself i couldn't help noticing the quote on top of him. I have heard all the hype about "the pale King" and was quite upset myself ...

Hello, I'm quite new in this site and don't know how reviews work here but here's a try: the concept is good, light-hearted and interesting though your prose seems to ...