Icaruss

Random Thought #3: If I got my girlfriend pregnant I wouldn't make her have an abortion. I would probably send her boxing. Or sign her up for some rugby lessons. ...

Oh, man . You are bad****. You are the coolest person in here. You are misunderstood. You have RAW TALENT™ . You don't care what anybody thinks! You are always ...

Random Thought #85: Does it make me deranged to think that this may be inappropiate? Teachers and students, man. It's just hard for me to think about any relationship in ...

You know, fantasy fiction and science fiction are probably the hardest things to write. It works when the magic and the, you know, fantasy is simply there, omniprescent, but subtle ...

My first suggestion would be to get rid of the shooting. Sure, "My brother,/had a gun" is a great way to end the poem, but Snoik is right, it seems ...

First sentences in, I already notice what your problem is: you give unnecesary information. It's not that you write bad, or that your story is boring, it's just that you ...

Oh, this is a great idea. It's the kind of idea that I wish I would've come up with. It's the kind of idea I'll probably steal in the future ...

Random Thought #54: One of my classic comments is that you shouldn't use itallics for thought. I know most of you do, but I still stand by it. First person ...

I'll feel bad about this later but: I didn't like it. It's like one of those songs rappers do about how tough and gangsta they are, only not as fun. ...

I wish I could say that this wasn't terrible, but it was. It starts out with a fight, and a death, and we can't possibly care about either of them ...

Alright, look. This isn't the kind of story I usually read. Most of the time I'm reading about throats being slit, girls being raped and guns being fired. I like ...

This was really good. And I do mean that. Your story has this fantasy aspect to it, this horror story feel that you never state, it's just there. And that's ...

Oh, this was heartbreaking, in that turn-your-eyes-away-from-the-movie kind of way. It's sad and you know it won't have a happy ending, but you can't help but look. You write good, ...

Random Thought #96: This just may be the best opening line I've read in quite some time. You set the tone for the rest of the piece immediately. Your characters ...

This is started out fine. No, not the little snip before the actual chapter, but the way the chapter begins. You narrate very well, using a few words to make ...