Iamyoursacrifice

Hello, forgottenfallen, I saw some small errors in your work and decided to edit them so they fit better. You can choose not to use my editted text, you might ...

I must admit I really like this story, I'm not very good at seeing corrections so it's difficult for me to try and find fault with it. I want you ...

This story is really good forgotten fallen there are only a few points I would like to acknowledge. So here we go... It seems you write in a style where ...

Hi ForgottenFallen I personally think you're good writer but if you're stuck I think I know what you should do. You should have Tempest screaming because his blood is poisoned. ...

I really do like this story, welldone on creating such an interesting storyline, but you have missed some simple punctuation at the beginning of the story such as( ", )it ...

I like this poem, be careful though. I think it should be more romantic and then skip to it being extremely depressive in fact change this verse: One last rose ...