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Re: Bathroom Blues
Consider putting this under the "humor" section; this is hilarious. I don't have much to say about your poem. It's simple, short, and sweet. You have a rhyming couplet near ...
Sep 20, 2017 -
Re: Mother
Good concept, plot and pacing. I would definitely rank this as an all around good piece. But let me try to get you to that fantastical place that we call ...
Sep 20, 2017 -
Re: Five Months
This is good. This is very good. The drama isn't drawn out and overdone. The tone is melancholic but not depressive. The imagery is somber and exquisite. I can see ...
Sep 11, 2017 -
Re: The Realisation
This is definitely an intriguing read, mostly because I don't know. That's it. "I don't know" is the appeal of your story. Maybe this is really happening in some fantastical ...
Sep 11, 2017 -
Re: Oh, Cherry Blossom: Chapter 1
Whoa. That sums up my review. The foreshadowing! The suspense! The action! This was great. My heart was racing through the latter half, and I absolutely loved it. Only a ...
Sep 11, 2017 -
Re: A Mystery at Lint High: Chapter One
This is a good first chapter to a story, but it can always be better, and I'm going to try my best to get you to that fictitious place called ...
Sep 11, 2017
