HopelessAbandon

Hi! Abandon here for some nitpicks. I haven't read any of the previous chapters, so I'm not going to comment on plot or character development etc. It'll be just some ...

Hello! Since I have not read the previous chapters, I'll mainly be looking for issues in grammar, sentence structure etc. rather than things like character development. I also apologize if ...

Hello! I haven't read any of your previous chapters, sorry! I'm just going to be reviewing on grammar etc. rather than on things like character development. Avery spun on his ...

Hello! Here for a review! I haven't read any of your previous chapters, unfortunately, so I'm going to focus mainly on grammar etc. rather than things like character development. “Mrs. ...

Here for another review! Once again, sorry if I repeat anything said already! His shadow danced on the sun lit blanket while the bright yellow sun reflected off his obsidian ...

Hello! Here to review! Sorry if I repeat anything said. I haven't read any of the previous chapters, so I'll be commenting mainly on grammar etc. instead of things like ...

Hello! Here for a quick review! I haven't read any of the previous chapters, so I'm going to try to stay away from content/plot. He did not know her. But ...

Hello! Sorry if I repeat anything that has been said! The shadowy figure’s eyes were like burning pools of red flame that gleamed in the darkness. A raging fire that ...

Hey! Here for another review. Zoltar woke to the sound of hisses and snarls all around him. He slowly opened his eyes. His heart nearly stopped upon seeing the sight ...

Hello, here for another review! I'll just jump right in. Stop slouching and suffering serpents stop yawning,” Since "suffering serpents" is a sort of cuss word, it interrupts the sentence. ...

Hello! HopelessAbandon here for another review, as requested :) First off, I wanted to suggest something. Your prologue directly connects to your first chapter, so I don't really understand why ...

Hi! Sorry for taking so long to get back to you with this review, but here I am! I only have time for the prologue right now, but I'll come ...

First of all, sorry for the delay in getting this review out. Secondly, this is a bit of a long post. I would suggest breaking it up next time to ...

Hello! Here for another review! This is my 80th review yay! Okay, so I'm not great at reviewing poetry, but since I've reviewed several of your other chapters, I'm going ...

Hi! Here to review! Sorry if I repeat anything already said... I look over at my little brother Kaden. He's sitting on his bed staring out of the window. I ...