Hetzie

Very good, I am liking very much :D Unusual structure but I think that makes it stand out more so, and place the emphasis on the whole forbidden. Keep it ...

It doesnt matter if its to abstract and obsolete, I think thats what makes it a good poem (in my opinion). 'It choses who to favor It chooses who to ...

I like it :) i like the way you described the movements of Darkness, to the point but still holds its mystery. Maybe try a little rhyming? is might help ...