Young Writers Society

Nice!

Let's see... Your poem is simple but strong. The good thing about it is that you know who your speaker is and what he/she is talking about.
I like how you wrote "Life" with cap meaning that it's an actual enity and somehow it's important to the speaker.

You may want to add more to it, but I think that short poems capture better the general atention.
And, also, I liked your strong ending. "Has it forgotten you?
Or has it not?"

It's mysterious and dark. I imagine the speaker reciting this last stanza in a whisper.

Janis

It doesnt matter if its to abstract and obsolete, I think thats what makes it a good poem (in my opinion).

'It choses who to favor
It chooses who to not.'

well that suggests to me that life is a matter of fate, and we can't control what happens even if things do not go to our likeing etc.

I really like it keep it up

hetz x

I think you should add on to it more. It was good though.

Life shall be an abstract entity
For whom we live after.

It chooses who to favor,
It chooses who to not.

Has it forgotten you?
Or has it not?