Hereitstarts

Thanks so much for the review!!! The criticisms will help alot, if you look at my comment in the above review should clear up what I was trying to get ...

I'll try my best, thanks so much!! It's one of my first poems so I'm still getting the hang of it :,)

Thanks so much for taking the time to even read the peice let alone leave a review, I do see where the metaphor for the leak is being lost and ...

Thanks for taking the time to read my poem, I'm very new to poetry so thanks a lot for your help with the punctuation and what not, I will defiantly ...

Thanks so much for your feedback :D I used the word 'take' twice just for emphasis, to really show that these men aren't giving themselves voluntarily, but if it doesn't ...

Thank you so much for taking the time to read it so thoroughly and yes whenever I do write its always in a way that is meant to be out ...

wow! brilliant, obvious concerns e.g punctuation, capitals but other than that wonderfully emotional peace, vivid concept, very effective.

sorry, my reply was suppose to be my review but I am new and still learning how to use this

sorry, my reply was suppose to be my review but I am new and still learning how to use this

this is just really beautiful, just simple yet affective, love it.

thank you, means a lot