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Re: In Between(Part one)
i like this story a lot. i felt bad for Jene at first but then when i found out it was her twin i was shocked and extremely sympathetic. i ...
Jan 11, 2008 -
Re: DoaV : Pilot section
okay, first and foremost i am VERY interested so keep writing this. now here are the things i think u should tweak or elaborate on: -the first quote doesnt have ...
Jan 11, 2008 -
Re: (I cannot think of a title)
this story caught my attention quickly. i hope you post more soon. i am very curious to know why only Tarina has a fairy and how she got one. how ...
Jan 10, 2008 -
Re: Stronger Than Starlight: Chapter One
i like this story. it immediately caught my attention and kept it. zoe is an easy character to relate too. i also like how you ended the chapter...rather i hate ...
Jan 10, 2008 -
Re: Story Deleted
wow...i really like your characters, especially charlotte she already has dimension....none of the other characters seem like main characters (YET?) but hey too are shaping up not sure where you ...
Jan 10, 2008 -
Re: the weeks ahead
i got through about half of the story but couldnt read any more because of the spacing and the lack of quotation marks...also there are a bunch of spelling and ...
Jan 10, 2008 -
Re: Daydreams before dawn
this story definitely sparked my interest...i want to read more about this character and find out where she is going....mb why she likes the dark so much...why she is taking ...
Jan 10, 2008 -
Re: this is a new piece so please read
i think the basis of this story is good but there are some things you can change that would make it better. -i dont think this entry is beleiveable as ...
Jan 10, 2008 -
Re: Gypsie Eyes
so its 10 am where i am and i just finished your whole story (having stayed up all night). you are a FANTASTIC storyteller...your characters are well thought out and ...
Jan 9, 2008 -
Re: magical love story
hey, im just going to list off what i think could be improved on and give examples if i can remember them. -the way he talks (i think someone else ...
Jan 9, 2008 -
Re: Blackbird
i liked this story a lot. im not going to go over grammatical stuff because people before me have already done that. overall what you have written has a kind ...
Jan 8, 2008 -
Re: The Broken -- Chapter One
there were a lot of things that i liked and disliked about this. first of all i think you are putting way too many commas, especially in the beginning. i ...
Jan 8, 2008 -
Re: Blood Moon: Chapter One
i like the story so far. i agree with the whole jumping three feet in the air thing too. it sounded awkward when i read it. i like the dynamic ...
Jan 8, 2008