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Hello there! So, I really like this piece. It's a bit short, but very intense and descriptive at the same time. Their hiding place was wet. This is a great ...

Wolfieeeeee! So happy to see this up, finally! Good Wolfie! *pats* So. Your review. i. Nit-picks Lyra didn’t know where she was, but it looked like a castle. Someone was ...

Hi, it's Hawkie. I'll be your reviewer today. Okay . . . this piece. I'm sorry to say I didn't care for it much, the way it is now. It ...

Hey, it's Hawkie, and I'll be your reviewer today. First of all, welcome to YWS! Second of all, your review. He was a sweet young boy Just turned seven Killed ...

Hi, Hawkie here. Like the above review says, this is too short and unclear. It's okay for short stories, especially short stories of this caliber, to have much less backstory ...

Hi, welcome to YWS! I'm honored to be your first reviewer. You have some cool ideas here. I like stories about animals, they make me feel happy inside. The way ...

Hi! ^^ Nice song. I'm Hawkie and I'll be reviewing it for you! ^^ First of all: the title. You need to know that "breath" is a noun. "Breathe" is ...

Hi! I liked your song; it's pretty cool! ^^ A few things, however: Every day in the street there is a fuss, For some reason I don't like the word ...

Hey, this is pretty cool. Short and to the point. One thing I don't get is the "waterless" in the fourth line. I like how you ease gradually from sea ...

Hey there. I'm Hawkie, and I'll be reviewing you today. i. Nit-picks I stand for a moment in the aisle and can feel everyone’s eyes on the black patch over ...

. . . wow. That was beautiful! I can't really think of much to critique. Seriously. I'm almost at a loss for words. Not completely, though! ;) One thing I ...

Hi Stripes! I'm Hawkie and I'll be reviewing you today. Why is your poem called "Granddad Dying?" There's nothing about a granddad in it, or death. Just a spider on ...

Hi, I'm Hawkie and I'll be your reviewer today. ^^ i. Nit-picks but they wouldn’t open under all of my strength. "Under" sounds awkward. I'd rephrase it as "they wouldn't ...

Hi Skittles, welcome to YWS! :mrgreen: I'm Hawkie, and I'm glad to be your reviewer today. If I'm harsh, don't take it personally. i. Nit-picks purpled seedless grapes. Purpled? Purple ...

Hi. ^^ I'm Hawkie and I'll be your reviewer today. My past reviews have been a bit harsh, so if I seem like that at all, it's nothing personal. It's ...