Harley

I like this. It was clearly more of a character ramble than something with a plot (yet), but I really liked the character's voice. Even before the character himself acknowledged ...

as a personal preference, i don't use capitals in poetry/lyrics. i just don't like them. thankyou for the critique. :] i must admit it's a lot better than the terrible ...

wow- it's really awesome because it's true- i haven't really thought about when i was younger in a while *reminisces*... simple times... :wink: x

one word: hee

I'm surprised you haven't heard it; you might have and not known it, though. "Touch Me" is a line in the song, that's why it's in there. I don't like ...

Lol- personally i like Blink-182 and i think they're pretty punk-rocky but never mind :D

:shock: Gorgeous... She's pretty much said it all :wink:

Wow, being compared to Sam. *is honoured* (and not in the sarcastic way- sam rocks :))

This is so good you almost want there to be an E in there so you feel ebtter about yourself :wink: really fantabulous, snoink. =D>

2 He was tall and thin, with bright dark eyes and a cute smile. He laughed a lot, and was overall a great guy to be with. His hands were ...

=) thanks peoples. probably the first song that really meant something to me, so it's good to see y'all like it.

We rushed over to him, throwing our precious boards on the concrete sidewalk. He was beat up pretty bad; bloody nose, burst lip and gashes all over his chest and ...

lol nice to get a good THOROUGH constructive crit.. *eyes all other people suspiciously* nah, ilike being praised.. :P i'm gonna edit it and work on these.. i'll repost the ...

~update~ We rushed over to him, throwing our precious boards on the concrete sidewalk. He was beat up pretty bad; bloody nose, burst lip and gashes all over his chest ...

:P shhhhhhh now