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Re: starting something
I counted twelve F-bombs. First off, I don't think that's really necessary. Second, what's the point of them? What's the point of this story? I can't quite figure out what's ...
Dec 8, 2008 -
Re: Reflection
I really like this poem. The words flow beautifully which makes for a very interesting poem. My only problem was with the repitition. It works with the poem, but it ...
Dec 7, 2008 -
Re: Dragon Hunters
Welcome to YWS! (I just joined too.. LOL.) I can't really say I like the idea of the story.. because I'm not sure what that idea is. Dragon Hunters? So ...
Dec 7, 2008 -
Re: Everlasting
It's too short, but that would make a good beginning. It's really hard for the reader to grasp what you're talking about. I love poems that rhyme, so I like ...
Dec 6, 2008 -
Re: A Cutters Dream
The poem plot is personally, drastically overused. The first sentence is a nice start: My dream is to be better than I am now But, after that you just got ...
Dec 6, 2008 -
Re: My pathetic love story Chap. 2
At first, when I started reading this.. I thought, "Just another Mary-Sue". But, reading further, Zac has his faults. It gives him depth. I like the story-line too. How Jane ...
Dec 6, 2008 -
Re: Worst Book You've Ever Read
Twilight. I'm not even saying that be I'm a down-right, absolute, positive hater. I'm saying that because it was BAD. It pretty much went like this: Bella: ZOMG, I just ...
Dec 4, 2008