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Hari1998

  • Short Story » Supernatural, Mystery / Suspense Re: A Chance

    Hi, Hope you are doing good, I really liked your writing the introductory paragraph is really intriguing and I love the way you described the character.I’m not really a master ...

    Sep 25, 2020
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, General Re: FyreFly - a crime/thriller pt 1

    Hi, It was a really interesting chapter and I couldn’t wait for the next one. I feel like you could have given a bit more of the context to engage ...

    Sep 22, 2020
  • Short Story » Realistic, Romantic Re: Milliebird

    Hi, Hope you are doing good. It was a really beautiful story. I really liked the amount of detail you put into the story, it was not too much and ...

    Aug 21, 2020
  • Short Story » General, Realistic Re: Luxury

    Hi, Hope you are doing good. I really loved your story, I loved the way you connect emotionally with the reader. I also liked how you reveal that the protagonist ...

    Aug 21, 2020
  • Short Story » Narrative, Culture Re: Hot and Fast

    Hi, hope you are doing good. At first glance, I thought this was some kinda cliché gangster story. But you really took a turn deep diving into the characters emotional ...

    Aug 21, 2020
  • Short Story » Realistic, Romantic Re: Dear Ex-Lover

    Hi, Hope you are doing good. I really loved the way you express the feelings, and it was a really nice try. Also there are few spelling mistakes which kind ...

    Aug 21, 2020


"The trouble with Borrowing another mind was, you always felt out of place when you got back to your own body, and Granny was the first person ever to read the mind of a building. Now she was feeling big and gritty and full of passages. 'Are you all right?' Granny nodded, and opened her windows. She extended her east and west wings and tried to concentrate on the tiny cup held in her pillars."
— Terry Pratchett, Discworld: Equal Rites