Hannah

So I did my best at rhyming poetry, too. I got reviews that said "rhyming sucks, don't do it" and I was like "you have no idea what you're talking ...

Definitely reconsider sticking inside of the rhyme. Especially when you're overflowing with love and words for the one you love, you don't want to be stuck choosing only words that ...

Hello, again! So, this has a similar tone to the previous poem. But you know what makes it different? The imagery. Before, you worked with a snake bite, and here ...

Hey there! I have a couple of things I'd like you to try. First of all, some of the sentence structure and punctuation is off in this poem. One way ...

I have no idea what the time structure is like in this chapter. I feel like several things happened, but I don't know in what order and what the significance ...

Hey there! Stopping in to help. :) I absolutely love the idea that this character's mother finds a box of books they made with her father years and years ago. ...

Listen, listen, listen to empressoftheuniverse if you're serious about this project. This chapter is much more satisfying than the last because here is what I was talking about: you're blending ...

This definitely feels like a completely different person. I can't say it feels like a completely different story, because I have no idea what the story is here. In two ...

Hey there! Thanks for all your kindness about the poems I've posted lately. Here I am to return the favor. (: A magnificent orb of white gold, it had punched ...

You know, I know what you went through. A lot of people know what you went through and are familiar with the same feeling. But what's interesting is the word ...

Hello! :D A piece for a contest, hmm? Let's see what we can do. First of all, I want to say that you're doing an excellent job of characterization right ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS. (: I hope you're having a nice time so far, and if you have any questions at all, don't hesitate to PM me. Now, on ...

Hey Kylyy. Back from Mowing the Lawn yet? Haha, my apologies for the delay. So, let's get going. they will all be rotting somewhat, weeping to be carried, rolling and ...

You were reaching for nice imagery, but didn't quite get there. I feel like the pattern you attempted took a lot away from the value of the poem, because I ...

Hmm. I want to ask you why you wrote this poem. What is the feeling that you felt when you were writing? Is there a specific way you wanted the ...