GryphonFledgling

Other people have gotten to the nitpicks before me... Meh... Anyway, I agree with Kylan on Caleb's gift of the rose. While I get that it is going along with ...

Erm, I'd have to disagree with 3B in that this one is easier to follow. I had a bit of a harder time in this one, what with the abstract ...

I agree with Stella: what does it feel like to be back in the game, whether or not he is uncomfortable with his surroundings. Is it like bicycle: you never ...

Ha! I was wondering why she wasn't freaking out more. But I guess in dreams, stuff either makes sense, doesn't scare you as much as it should, or scares you ...

Eee, I'm going to sound a little bit like Jiggity up above me. I do think that this was a little overwritten. You make a point and then kind of ...

I dunno. I think I'd be scared to have Henry in love with me. He sounds, from this piece, like the kind that could very easily turn into a stalker. ...

I'd have to agree. As pathetic as it sounds, long passages of internet writing tend to daunt people, myself included. For some reason, long internet posts are not regarded with ...

Aww, this was really sad. I liked it though. Did D addy burn breakfast? When used as a proper name (like kids referring to their parents) it should be capitalized. ...

Awwww. Yeah, it was one of those pieces that just makes you go *squee*. Nice stuff. But the writer in me must engage. This was really short. It was really ...

Hey and welcome to YWS! XxxDo did a pretty good job of editing, so I won't repeat what was so masterfully covered. My big thing is about your description: where ...

Really, really great. It wasn't what I expected at all and it was wonderfully written. I was a little confused about the card on the window, though. Maybe I'm missing ...

I gots no title suggestions for you, I'm afraidies. I am not too talented at titles. But I must say that I liked the story so far. I'm afraid I ...

I liked it so far, but it seems to me that the MC is pretty cool with her friend being dead and her father having done the deed. I would ...

I'll admit, I didn't finish this. What with whatever with going on with the formatting, spacing errors, punctuation, capitalization and misuse of words, I just could not work my way ...

Ah, good times with Cornelia Funke. I absolutely love these books, but I don't really know why. I agree with a lot of the people who are saying that the ...