GryphonFledgling

Hey there! People were talking about how long this was. Long entries are difficult to review well online, but you have an easy fix: I do believe your story is ...

I like the concept behind this, I really do. I'd like to see what you do with it. Two things I noticed: 1) Sounds like I'm living in paradise, haw? ...

This. Was. Beautiful. Reminds me a bit of 1984 or V for Vendetta . I covered my mouth as the man hopped back in front of the tank ' s ...

I - I'm not sure what to say about this piece other than that it was lovely. It just sort of carried me along in this beautiful daze and by ...

It's funny, but all of the things you listed as being unsure of are the things I loved most about this story. The dryness of the paragraphs is something I ...

Shiiiiiny. Seriously, that was awesome. The twist at the end is completely unexpected, but makes perfet sense in hindsight. Very, very nice. Two small steps, steady and sure, finds him ...

Hello there! Wow. This was amazing. I especially loved the voice of the narrator in the prologue. Really heartwrenching in all of its confusion and anger. *thumbs up* Some quick ...

Omigoodness, but this is one huge entry. It's really hard to read and review something this big, so I would suggest reposting this in parts. You already have it divided ...

Is there more to this? I must have more! Seriously, this was really short but amazingly entrancing. The way it was formatted made it feel like poetry, but it read ...

Nice. I liked the character relationship in this one as they sort of just reminisce and realize their stances with one another. Break ups are the hardest things that a ...

I really liked that little intro monologue at the beginning. It sucked you in, let you know you were on a different world and all in all got you ready ...

I liked the dialogue in this chapter. I don't know exactly what it was about it, but I seriously really liked it. How old is Shanna exactly? I keep thinking ...

Hey hi! I haven't read the unedited version, so you just get my thoughts on this one as it stands now! I'm a little confused as to why this is ...

Whoa, brain parasites were totally not what I was expecting. Really awesome that. Sort of writing this review as I read... Out of curiosity: why 27? Were there 26 others ...

Whoa, suddenly the pace picks up. My main criticism would be how quick Kari is with everything. What made her jump so quickly to the conclusion that Lorna was the ...