GryphonFledgling

Hey hi! First off, I kind of like this idea. It's not often that we get to see adults acting like this in stories, certainly not from their viewpoint, and ...

Hey-oh! Continuing on from the last chapter! Same thing here as with the last chapter: when your character is thinking something that is specifically thought, go ahead and italicize it. ...

Hello! This is a prequel novel to the Final Fantasy series? Like, the game series? If so, seems like it should be in FanFiction novels. But I'm intrigued to see ...

Zomigosh, so many characters! For realzies, there were so many characters with odd names introduced so quickly, I wasn't sure what to make of this whole thing. They all knew ...

Hello hey! All those stories about vampires and werewolves being natural enemies are just some sad excuse for not having a good plot or conflict for their stories. The truth ...

Well howdy, I'm back! Again, still in love with this. The writing is very nice and your main character surprisingly sympathetic for an assassin (even in the last chapter, I ...

Hello there! I liked this. It was crisp and moody and full of action. I'm definitely intrigued and want to read more about this character and how she's going to ...

Hey hi! A few little things real quick, then my overall impressions: Last time it had been Lee KiBum. A bit nitpicky, but perhaps have something like "Last time, he ...

Hey hi! Is this the first piece to the story? Or is it some excerpt from the middle? I'm assuming it's the beginning, seeing as how we're sort of told ...

Hey hi! This actually reminds me a lot of Shiver by Maggie Steifvater. It's not exactly the same, but the premise is similar enough and the book popular enough that ...

Mmm, this was interesting. I liked the sort of buisness-like, detached nonsense directions the conversation was taking in the midst of the actions. However, it did seem a bit odd. ...

Ha, probably should have read the prologue before the first chapter, but I missed it somehow. But hey, I'm here now, right? Same note here that I had with your ...

Mmm, I like this. Between the attitude, the two sets of twins, the bickering... I like it. It has a nice punch to it. Color me intrigued. One thing that ...

A bit confused again, but just sort of rolling with it at this point to see if anything gets explained next chapter. The reactions here were a bit better than ...

I was a bit confused by this chapter. I mean, I know it's supposed to be sort of confusing, but I wasn't really able to follow the events at all. ...