Gristlecharm

I understand what you mean now, Stranger, thank you for pointing it out. I have tried to fix it now. Thanks again.

excuse me?

You're not helping

I feel like this was more of one big criticism than a review. Because you didn't give me anything constructive to work with. And you were very harsh. It's not ...

I think it was interesting what you said. It was cool. No worries :)

I know. I was just responding to your ideas with my ideas.

Thank you for your review. You've made some interesting comments and taken note of them. I see what you mean about the structured way the poem is written eg. regular ...

I knew someone would say that. In England "faeces" can be spelled with an "a". Yeh a lack of serotonin is the chemical reason between anxiety but this poem was ...

The idea is that the poem is random, scattered and broken. As from the thoughts and perspective of the person narrating it. They make sense to me as a writer, ...

Lulz

Thank you for the lovely review. Your comments are really helpful and I have taken them on board. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks again. :)

I have noticed the pattern. I just don't get why it was done.

Hello. I really like how your poem separates the simple from the complex, as with ideas. All writers here will be able to understand your metaphor; and I personally find ...