Griffinkeeper

Boring. 60 seconds I'll never get back. You can at least pride yourself on the fact that it is written well enough to read :) So you thought it was ...

Thank you both. I'll be revising this to reflect your comments.

I couldn't get into the present tense at all. Stories are usually told after the fact, so why are you using the present tense instead of the past tense? I ...

You need to post two reviews, then I'll unlock this thread.

The Pillar had just finished firing a volley when the Gryphon's volley arrived. The Pillar had excellent shielding, being a cruiser. It had withstood the conventional attacks well. SPEW weaponry ...

Poems belong in poetry. Since this is a riddle, then it belongs in other poetry. *Moved*

Or is Ethan the character from Ctrl Alt Delete an online comic about a video game freak?

Please use PM's. I rated it R for language and sexual content.

The title was the most annoying thing. Rouge is a color. Rogue is something else.

This reminds me of the YWS Storybook: "YWS: The Gathering" If the story stops, all the authors die... I love the imagery you incorporated in this, it kind of made ...

Very clever. I like it. Will we see more?

*Rated R for language.*

The Pink Panther makes me think about Nate. He's just sort of lurking around in the background, doing clever things with code and the occasional mischief.

"We lost it," Adelaide said. "Where was the last whisper?" Grif asked. "Near the High Flyer " Adelaide said. "Send Crysi the last known coordinates of the whisper." "Done," Adelaide ...

Have you read the book "Halo: The Fall of Reach?" It really goes into the Spartan's mentality and training. Once you read it, you'll be able to improve this far ...