Griffinkeeper

I could probably do the same for other topics, but it wouldn't be half as satisfying. Although it would be funny to listen to a boy band sing it.

I like this. It actually isn't a depressing poem... ...For a change.

Ramble off quantum psychics through QUANTUM PHYSICS! NOT PSYCHICS! One is the description of how things work, another is a group of old ladies who hand out lotto numbers.

*Moved to Fan Fiction Forums.*

This is good for your age, write more. My favorite part was this: "A rustle of sheets and moaning echoed throughout the stone walls. His purchase stirred and wiggled." It ...

This is good for your age, write more.

This is good for your age. Write more.

I think this forum is for Fan-Fiction stories. Fan-fiction storybooks, (unless I'm wrong) still belong in the storybook forum. Admins?

Bad spelling. Also, this doesn't really seem to be interesting reading. Novels tell a story, but this diary seems to be more of a random blog entry than any fluid ...

The readability was really difficult, your big paragraphs usually could be broken into several paragraphs (remember one paragraph=1 Topic Sentence and 4+ details for the topic sentence). It wasn't rea

Time for part 2. I can remember the night my brother went missing as clear as ever, even today . 1. There is no reason for this to be included ...

Sounds like a pretty short story to me. I'm worried because I didn't see anything to make the story different from any of the 89 million suicide stories out there.

I'd use a glossary more for describing unique devices. One of the things I enjoy reading is about Battletech, which spawned the famous Mechwarrior games. They have a glossary in ...

*Bumps up the rating to R.* When you use F bombs, it goes to R, Okay?

Do you think you could get rid of some the hyphens? It is really screwing up my browser when it's displayed on the front page.