Griffinkeeper

This is rated R! A lot of bad language means you need to take special care to rate it properly. Otherwise, it shows up on the main page for every ...

"LEECHES! EEEEEKKKKKKK!!!!!!! GET THEM OFF ME!!! GET THEM OFF ME!!!" *Pulls out a lighter.* "I'LL BURN YOU ALL OFF ME YOU SONS OF A B- AHHHH! MY CLOTHES!!!!!!!!" *Runs around ...

I have some suggestions that might help. For most essays, we have this basic structure: 1. Thesis 2. Body (Includes points 1 through n.) 3. Conclusion. Right now though, the ...

In general: Your structure is bad. This needs to be properly formatted into paragraphs, not the blob of text it is now. Also, how is this Action/Adventure? As far as ...

Life is hard to understand as it is. But it’s even harder to understand how people think when they’re right at that pivotal age between kid and adult. In other ...

I like how it starts off. The imagery is a little jerky, but that is how Miyazaki works anyway. You typoed with "breaks", it should be "brakes." As you continued ...

Kind of random. It is lacking in purpose, which is saddening for a piece of satire. When you're using stories like this, it is best to have a moral attached ...

“What if I told you that I didn’t love you anymore?” asked the girl questioningly , while a genuine curiosity in her delicate but firey brown eyes. 1. You already ...

Reactions: Initial: BACK DEMONS OF GLOB TEXT! Second: Could she stuff any more adjectives in there if she tried? Teritary: This is too confusing. First off, I like to leave ...

Uh... I don't get it. This supposed to be a parody, but it doesn't really make fun of Monty Python at all. It seems to have the characteristics of a ...

Per your request, I now begin an exhausting critique. Current time is 5:34 PST. Remy By: Misty Lynn Ellingburg (2/13/06) Nice, it is always nice to give yourself some credit. ...

((OOC: This is my first ever attempt at romantic fiction, so feel free to give pointers :D )) Okay. Chapter 1 Ouch, terrible! ;) I was at the local dog ...

I had awakened from an unpleasant dream in which I was captured and brutally tortured. It had reminded me of my early days as a government agent. I, Vincent Strike ...

youre right , im a terrible writer but ill still try untill im told im c***.then ill just give up. thanks for bieng honest, ill take more time making sence ...

For a moment, I thought YWS was under attack by spammers. I don't know why, but I'm happy to see it's a false alarm. Anyway, I don't like poems that ...