GrenadeCatcher

Hey there! This is a beautiful piece. It's really emotional and raw, and I love it. I think in the second line "Tamped down by that avid search" Search seems ...

Hmm... I only read the first paragraph, then I had to stop. Have you ever heard of the Maximum Ride series? There's Angel, a six year old with blue eyes ...

Hey! Happy to be your first reviewer:) I really like to rip EVERYTHING apart, and I've got a lot of time. I'm going to be VERY, VERY nit-picky. Sorry if ...

Hi there! I'm going to review this for you:) Grammar, punctuation, paragraphing, etc.: It all started at the age of 15, we entered Australia after we left our war- torn ...

Hey! So I'm here to review this, like you asked! You had some problems with italics, I think. There are some paragraphs that are italicized and I'm not sure if ...

Hi! I'm going to review this, obviously! Where am ? Kat thought to herself. Well it's dark and cramped and my leg seems to be attached to something. A chain, ...

Wow, I'm not sure what the writers Roulette is, but this probably has a really good chance of winning! You have great details, not too much so that we know ...

Oooh I didn't even want to read this... I couldn't get past the boring cliche opening! Don't take it personally, but "hi my name is..." does NOT grab my attention ...

“Come out; come out, where ever you are Calipso. I don’t bite… much.” He crackled. So this is talking, and when you have a new line of talking you need ...

Hi! So this will be hard to criticize since your brother is only ten, but I'll give it a shot. Sorry if I'm too hard on ya'! ESCAPE FROM THE ...

I think this is a good story so far, but why does he have a Russian accent if he's American? Make sure you capitalize the first word in every sentence! ...

Hi! I'm happy to be your first reviewer! First of all, I noticed that you put a -- before each ''. That isn't necisary! It actually bugs me, but so ...

Hi I'm Grenade Catcher! This has a lot of potential, but I think you need to slow it down a bit. You jump from one point to another without any ...

Woahhhhh this is REALLY long. I wouldd consider moving this to the novel section and making each chapter its own thread! I can't read and review all this!!!! With the ...

Hey Bro! I'm going to review this peice. Woke up in this here bed and faced a chainsaw mounted shotgun sitting 6 feet from me in my grandma's favorite chair. ...