GrayButterfly

This is gorgeous! I felt like I was reading a published book. Your skills in imagery are fantastic and your voice stayed consistent throughout the piece, great work. Your tactic ...

First off, I just want to say this story has a great foundation in the sense that it's going to relate to a lot of people in different ways. For ...

Oooohh this is beautiful! I love your word choice and the overarching theme with the destructive mom ordeal. > My waking hours are punctuated with screams of "Get up! Sleeping ...

This is quite unique, and I enjoy your story so far. Not that I'm a super experienced writer, but my advice for furthering the story would be to plot main ...

This is beautiful. The raw emotion in it. I can hear your voice through the broken words. It doesn't sound super poetic, but that is what makes it so beautiful. ...

Hello! I love how thought provoking this is. It's almost other worldly because it's not something the average person thinks about. This is a cool concept, and I like how ...

Hello! This is a very lovely story. I like that it's not a cheesy fairy tale romance, but rather a feeling that happens in real life. Your story described a ...

Hello! Can I just say, this was beautiful!! The story flowed so smoothly--every word, comma, everything-- it all worked so well! Your characters captured me even though I have not ...

Hello! I really like this story concept. Zombie stories are always fun to read! Also, it's cool to hear a story from a middle school student's perspective. A lot of ...

Hello! I just want to say, I'm in love with this story. This is the only chapter I've read but I love the tone throughout the piece. I'm not sure ...

Hello! Thanks for letting me review your story. I'm kind of a picky person, so you shouldn't take all of this to heart.