Grandison

Overall opinion: it was romantic, but I'm with her, I don't agree with the military, perhaps I'm biased due to my religious beliefs, but I just don't agree. Why bothers ...

This is what America is all about. I oughta print this out and pin it up somewhere. I feel like this does define white America, not all white America, but ...

First off...what? You're a boy! When I first read this I assume the writer was a girl, kudos for you for writing such a convincing female voice! Secondly, I'm a ...

Um, hmm... The idea of the song is interesting and a good message. But the lyrics I'm not too sure of. There's no rhyming scheme for the song and I ...

It's dark and twisted! I like it. You can tell the MC truly has no emotional attachment to those who just perished as he's enjoying or stoically watching their demise. ...

This isn't long but it says a lot! When I read the title I expected a twist with love, but I like what you did by making it how nature ...

Hmm, I like it as a free-style, but I'm not seeing how the ending gives off that she was raped. Also, it should be 'prey' instead of 'pray.' But this ...

Spotted a few mistakes, titles of television shows should be in italics, so it's The Fresh Prince of Bel Air, not "The Fresh Prince of Bel Air." Song titles, however, ...

The first paragraph has some errors, for instance : "Dylan's parents died when the day he turned nineteen." "He was living an immature life that lead him into the most ...

This is interesting how you just jumped straight into the action like you did. I couldn't exactly find any mistakes to correct you on, so I'm not going to go ...

I really liked this one! I'm assuming the guy just had a really bad trip? It was a little confusing because at one point he was leaving the house, the ...

Well it was written well, I couldn't find anything to nit pick, but what confused me was the meeting of a celebrity. I think you should explain who he was ...

Hi there =D Even though this was quite short, and I mean short, I thought it said a lot. It says that our MC isn't like everyone and is possibly ...

When it comes to my critique you caught the error, so no need and repeating that. As for the story over all, I liked it. It really pulled me and ...

It's good to see more of Jonah, it's been a while! Like Lava said this was quite a short chapter. I get that he's confused on his whereabouts, but I ...