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Re: Butterfly! Part one...
Flame here! Go Icicles :D! In my novel, I'm also rotating between the perspectives of multiple protagonists. The reviews I've received warned me to be careful with making the story ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: The Book Man, Chapter 8 (Revised)
Flame here! Happy Review Day! I'll admit, I don't know what to say about this. Everything was paced well, worded well, the descriptions well-executed. As in, they didn't dominate; they ...
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Re: Twisting the mask.
Flame here! Go Icicles! :D The title caught my eye. So I clicked on it to inspect, and I was...blown away. You'd expect an AAA scheme to brush memories of ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Blood and Silver Ch. Three
Flame here! Happy Review Day! Your grammar's impeccable, your flow flawless, and your descriptions...breathtaking's too weak and watery a word (I try hard at consonance, I know.) Sentence structure wa
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Wake Chapter 2
Flame here! Go Icicles :P! I'm totally not jealous that you're equally skilled in prose and poetry... You've really developed a nice flow. The descriptions compliment the action, rather than ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: The Undead, Golden, Angry Birds [Part 2] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Back again! Please, please, please, please, please--when are you going to submit the next chapter? I'm dying to read more! Not just that your writing is beautiful, but seven swans ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: The Undead, Golden, Angry Birds [Part 1] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Back again! Yep, can't shake me loose. And with this review (just noticed this - I feel so accomplished), I'll earn my fourth star! I really love how you accentuated ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Five Golden Rings in a Dreamworld [part 2] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
This only received four likes? Shame on all YWSers :D. So, another great chapter done by Deanie! Beautiful descriptions (elaborate, yet leaving room open for interpretation), well-measured pace, and h
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Five Golden Rings in a Dreamworld [part 1] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Hey there, Deanie! You just can't shake me loose. Those likes are well-deserved. I can see you filling the holes, sketching out the characters, painting the setting, but not all ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: The Doctor and the giant calling birds (Part 4 Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Doctor Who? This is a dream come true... My favorite's Ten, too (what's up with me and unintentional rhyming today? :P). He possesses a very distinct personality. And his goodness. ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: French Hens and the Spirit (Part 3 Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
I’m the male Katniss.” What about Legolas? :cry: His name sounds funny, too... Alright, onto the review! (Totally intended that to rhyme.) I enjoyed this even more, if possible. You're ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: The Dove, the Tortoise and the War (Part 2 the Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Back again! This is addicting. First off, attractive titles. I love how you're basing this off The Twelve Days of Christmas--and submitted this right before Christmas! :P And I don't ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: A Partridge and a Pear (Part 1 of The Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Flame here, as promised! You snared my interest from the start. And elves? Enigmatic forests? I'm so following this novel. Just have to say, your writing suits the theme so ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Diamond of The Lost Soul.
Oops! I didn't know there was a prologue! Not much to say. Well-done, once again. The descriptions were elaborate but didn't dominate. Perfect prologue (yep, I try hard at alliteration.). ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Diamond of the Lost Soul 3
Back again! I can't believe this hasn't received any reviews. Dazzling description, advanced vocabulary laced through the casual speech--I can't compliment you enough. Ooh, am I repeating myself? You
Feb 23, 2014