Gnomish

Not much to say. I liked the joke Hades made at breakfast, “Good morning,” he greets me cheerfully. “Come break your fast.” It adds some straight up humour to him. ...

I liked how you made it seem like a disaster had happened to you in the beginning, before you revealed it was just spicy soup. Anyways, excellent poem! -Gnomish

Nice! I feel the exact same way... -Gnomish

Nothing much to say in this chapter. I was a bit confused about why Hades wants to let those souls out if they deserved to be in Tartarus, but maybe ...

Awesome! I liked how you explained things that he did in a humorous way. For example, "I tilt my head (more for effect, because I can think without tilting my ...

Hi again! Only one thing today... "Aspen put her feet on the gas pedal". Feet? I don't drive, but I'm pretty sure you only put one foot on the gas ...

Nothing to say, great job! PS. I never imagined Cerberus as white, did you just imagine that or is it written somewhere? That's a cool fact if it is. -Gnomish

Hi again! "The ground shakes under my feet. Reflexively, I hold out my arms to keep from falling over. At first I think it’s an earthquake, but as we rise ...

Hi! "He cries when he’s chosen, and the crowd applauds. One of the boys makes wet sniveling sounds, mocking him. I glare at him, wondering how anyone so stupid could ...

Hi! I've just got a nit-picky detail for you. You said, "Athens in the dark is like an oil painting—rich and vivi." I think you mean vivid. You forgot the ...

Great job! I liked how you made the beginning suspenseful, by having her running down a cliff. I'm not really a goat person, and when you said nanny I thought ...

I didn't see anything that I can critic. Great job!

Thanks for the review! The mark is just a symbol that all types of dragons have on their wings so that they can recognize each other. I'll try to clear ...

That was amazing! I really liked how you added a lot of humour into it, and even though it was quite short it gave me a lot of the satisfaction ...

Adorable story! I'd like a bit more description on how Maggie is a "Avian human". You mentioned that her ma had made her a cake with candles, but how did ...