Young Writers Society

Hi it is mthanmark263 to do a review and can I just say really cool story. You really talented because this was an amazing and interesting story to read. It is the kind of story I would tell my sister to cheer up her day. First of all I loved the way you connected the name dragonflies to the little dragon Tinius Minimus cool name by the way. Second this was short and interesting to read, it was like I was watching a movie while reading this story. My favorite part was when the dragon saw the fly and his dragon instinct took over and the humans clapped. It was really straight to the point actually and one of my best stories. If I may ask where did you get the idea of writing this story.

Keep writing you really talented I can wait for your next work

Hi it is mthanmark263 to do a review and can I just say really cool story. You really talented because this was an amazing and interesting story to read. It is the kind of story I would tell my sister to cheer up her day. First of all I loved the way you connected the name dragonflies to the little dragon Tinius Minimus cool name by the way. Second this was short and interesting to read, it was like I was watching a movie while reading this story. My favorite part was when the dragon saw the fly and his dragon instinct took over and the humans clapped. It was really straight to the point actually and one of my best stories. If I may ask where did you get the idea of writing this story.

Keep writing you really talented I can wait for your next work

Hello there, Gnomish!

This is an adorable story that I found kind of fun. It was short and sweet and kiddish, in a way. (I especially liked how you cleverly used Tinius Minimus as the dragonfly's name :p). I think my favorite part about this story was how these dragons, who had to hide away in fear, were now celebrated by humans. It's a rather triumphant story and leaves one with a good feeling at the end.

Something that confused me, though, was the mark. All dragons have a dragon mark on their wings (though later it's noted that "dragons without a mark were exiled from birth," which made me curious), but what confused me was what the mark was. For a second I thought it was the wings because dragonflies fly so fast you can't even see their wings, and that's why they could get away with hanging around humans. BUT. I don't know if that's true. It might help to clear that portion of the story up. :]

The main dragonfly seems so cute - you might want to consider giving him a name. :p If you want to go into more detail with this story, I think that'd be great. You don't have to go Rudyard Kipling style, but something about this does remind me of his stories, (the Just So stories, at least, which are so much fun!) It might give a little more flavor to the story.

Anyhow, thanks for sharing! I hope you continue writing and I certainly hope to see more of your stories soon.

ta-ta!
~rosette <3

Hi there!
This is a cute story! I like it. .
There is one sentence that I would change up a bit.

This one:
“Guys, come on. If we fly really fast they can’t see our mark, and when we eat bugs they cheer!”

While it is clear the dragon is talking about the humans, I would still say "humans" in this sentence. I think it would flow a little better. That is just me though.

That is all I noticed. Really good story!