Gnomish

Great so far! I can totally relate with Cass on both the waking up/falling asleep thing, and that my best friend is always effortlessly more perfect than me. One thing, ...

Hi! First of all, this sentence seems awkward. "She asks me, eager to change the subject, it seems to me." Maybe try changing it to something like "She asks me, ...

I think this is my favourite chapter! Don't have anything to say, except that I always want to incorporate the protagonist getting a little house or cottage with everything in ...

I really liked this chapter! I especially appreciated how Persephone left to go live with Hades, because of the classic greek myth. The simile in the last sentence was perfect, ...

Hi! I don't see a problem with the timing at the beginning, due to the fact that you mentioned how long it had been since leaving it was clear to ...

Hi! First off, I'd like to say that you should definitely publish it, I really felt like I couldn't wait to keep reading, which isn't something that I truly feel ...

Ha! This was hilarious! I loved how simple it was, and the last sentence was perfect! The only criticism I have to say is that your spacing was off. I'm ...

That was great! I liked how you revealed that Lady Dubal was in on the assassination, You also added a lot of detail about the manor and the dance, which ...

I really liked this story, but I'll jump write into some things that seemed strange to me. In the beginning of the last paragraph you say... "She slipped into the ...

That was amazing! I really liked how you added a lot of humour into it, and even though it was quite short it gave me a lot of the satisfaction ...

That was so beautiful! I found it really well done how you slowly leaked bits of her past into the story, instead of dumping everything on at once. I didn't ...

That was so touching! I think you did a wonderful job at describing the emotions that both Peter and Tony experienced. I almost cried in part of it! Something I ...

Wow! I loved the twist at the end, I was almost worried reading it that it would just be a classic "knight kills dragon and marries the princess" story, and ...

I really liked this story, it definitely had the right atmosphere. I liked how you talked about Siri talking like your grandma, and how the TV screen said "I HATE ...

First off, I'd like to say that I liked how you didn't mention that it was a dream anywhere in the middle, and how she didn't see the book glowing ...