GibsonGirl

The cool Matt...the lyrics are just wicked cliche. He mentions "blackness" 4815162342 times.

Yield to the sign Pray to your God Nothing is mine It’s all a façade This is the part that sounded forced. Other than that, it's pretty good.

Hmm. This is pretty good. There's some forced rhyming here, which I don't have time to point out. I'll (hopefully) be back later to say more.

Maggie and Emily: Thanks for posting, even though you've probably seen it in person. I hope there's somebody to sing it too... Lufgif: I think she means that it doesn't ...

Wow, like everyone said, this is amazing. At first I actually didn't like it that much. I thought it was just another sort of average poem. When I realized it ...

I only have a minute, but here goes: The only problem I have with this is the use of "life" in the last line, as it's the word you used ...

I really like this too. It makes you think about society in general, and it's cool how you got your point across in a story this short. [/quote]

Wow, I really don't know why there are no other posts on this. It's really good. I know this isn't very constructive, but there's nothing I would change. Good job.

Mag! UPDATE NOW! I'm dying here! It's awesome, btw. I love Sirius...mostly 'cuz he's hot. Hehe. Is he actually gay?

First of all, I really like the title of this song. It's really cool. I also thought that the question mark was sort of out of place, but other that ...

...Isn't that song by Audioslave? It's a really great song, but you might want to say you didn't write it so people don't get confused.