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please...PLEASE! Tell me this is a made up story! It's kind of horrible but you are such a great writer! I admire your work *Sol clicks like*

Gracias, Becca! :)

Yes, thanks! But I don't consider this 'Greek mythology'... I made it more like a tale. :D

I thought this was good. I liked your other poem about the star better, but considering this was your first poem, it was really good. Nice job! Hahahaha! Yeah, I'm ...

Actually, as for the English version, I've seen worse on the site that WEREN'T translated from Spanish. My (very) limited knowledge of Spanish helped to translate for the most part, ...

Well it was good for a poem that you wrote back when you were twelve. Mine would've sucked back then. I like it a lot. Even if it might seem ...

Hey Solv, Well, I can't really critique the English because that's not really the poem, and I can't speak Spanish so I can't help you much there. The reason I'm ...

Gracias, Liby! :D

Wow! That's amazing! I never thought of something like that :shock: it's true!

But they get to suffer from permanent immaturity, one of the worst ills Wow that sounds like a few people I know who went to school with me. Well that's ...

Very nicely done, Solv. I'm looking forward to chapter 1.1 . THAAAAAAAAAAANKS!! :smt003

Haha, I actually rather enjoyed this. Tell your brother to keep writing. hahaha :D Thank you, Nate! I'll tell him... *Sol's little brother is jumping all around the house* :smt003

Hey there, Sol. Nice seeing you around these poetry forums. ^__^ Anyhoo, this doesn't look like much of a poem to me. Poems don't need to rhyme, but they need ...

It doesn't have to rhyme. However, poems do need to have a rhythm in order to distinguish it from prose. Right now, it's kind of hard to find the flow ...

not bad. though permanent immaturity isn't really a problem. i hate being a teen ...but then i love it I think permanent Immaturity is a BIG problem! You hate being ...