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Well it's about war. The first and last stanza are about power struggles between countries in power and the countries they have power over. The middle two stanzas are about ...

Well it's about war. The first and last stanza are about power struggles between countries in power and the countries they have power over. The middle two stanzas are about ...

Thank you! And thanks for pointing out my tense mistakes!

You requested a review from me on this piece, but I can't review it. I can't find anything that I could help you with. This piece has an extreme 'literature' ...

You were spot on Adna! Thanks for the suggestions. :)

Percy, I always have such high expectations when I go to read one of your poems. You never fail to exceed them. But this is more. I can't describe how ...

Stuff is making sense now. :D You're quite welcome, dear!

Yeah it can be a bit confusing at first, but you'll catch on. :)

Small tip for reviewing poetry: it's considered rather tasteless to comment on use of punctuation and capitalization. Poetry is a lot looser in terms of conventional English language rules. For ...

Small tip for reviewing poetry: it's considered rather tasteless to comment on use of punctuation and capitalization. Poetry is a lot looser in terms of conventional English language rules. For ...

No problem! Well to spice things up, if that's what you're looking for, methods such as foreshadowing could help. For example, referencing the gun. It makes the reader think "Why ...

Yeah there's a few small differences :)

It's 'realised' in the UK Ireland

The reason 'our' is capitalized is to say 'My home is with my family and friends.' I was saying that home is when you're with people you love. If I ...

Well the lack of capitalization is to emphasize the word 'our'. This entire poem is only one sentence. In poetry, I prefer to capitalize by sentence, not line. The words ...