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Re: God's Grace
This baby I bestow thee, She will be your saving grace. From all the deity she is yours, Such a special gift is a rarity. The flow is just floating ...
Apr 7, 2009 -
Re: Kalyug
The skies darken, As the sun dies. Up in the heavens, The angels cry. Since this is a beginning, I will give the boring imagery and uninterested tone of the ...
Mar 30, 2009 -
Re: house-2
How am I suppose to live in a house so empty? A house with nothing in it but furniture and walls in it?A house with no love, and no family. ...
Mar 30, 2009 -
Re: Winter Epiphany
The gaunt and effete trees have left the earth repugnant that not a man with open eyes this carcass earth could please. That first two lines are painfully ugly. Read ...
Mar 26, 2009 -
Re: YWS Bill of Rights
This is basically glorified fanfiction, why are the moderators paying so much serious attention to it? Not really. Some members have defended serious illegal activities and they have been banned ...
Mar 19, 2009 -
Re: Deleted
This poem isn't going to win any contest. Let's begin: The content is basically a laundry list of events and incidents, and then a shallow remark on the general concept ...
Mar 18, 2009 -
Re: Save Me
Humiliation exceeds the involuntary rush of blood to my cheeks. Truth seems to be something that exudes. Even before the poem has really started thematically, your first two lines have ...
Mar 14, 2009 -
Re: I trip over sidewalks
[quote=LoveableLittleSock] I trip over sidewalks, I trip over plants I trip over pebbles and the hem of my pants All this as you run you’re able to see But nevertheless, ...
Mar 10, 2009 -
Re: New Day
Do you hang on to yesterday's newspaper, believing it to be the rarest of all treasures? I cringed at the line breaks, all of which seem random at best. What ...
Mar 10, 2009 -
Re: Writers block
My mind, Pinned down, Unable to think, unable to right, You may have meant "write" instead of "right". I will assume, though, that you meant what you put there; I'm ...
Mar 10, 2009 -
Re: Meet Humbert
After giving this poem one read-through, I might as well mention that since it seems like a short, spontaneous and light one, my comments should be taken as subjective since ...
Mar 6, 2009 -
Re: The Writer's Inspiration
Sitting here at my desk, at my chair A clean sheet before me like a breath of fresh air I pick up my pen, tap my head to think A ...
Mar 2, 2009 -
Re: The Others
The bells rang throughout the hallways of Saint Bishop Academy. Soon, the hallways flooded with jocks, cheerleaders, nerds, and the ‘Others’ as everyone else called them. They weren’t so differe
Mar 2, 2009 -
Re: Fire
I stared at the red flames dancing on a silent beautiful melody. It's warm battled the freezing night, It lives, it shines a radiant light. Already there is a tense ...
Feb 28, 2009 -
Re: Poop Poop
To be honest, I agree as well. It sucks, I know, but the point is I had so much fun writing this XD And that's what a hobby of writing ...
Feb 27, 2009
